Ire/"The King Is Dead" is currently being beta'ed.
Which is farther than any other novel-length story I've written has gotten.
Yay.
Saturday, May 28, 2011
Sunday, April 17, 2011
During a big climatic scene.
" “You mistake me. I don’t want to be friends with you. I want you dead. I erased all chance that you would have a change of heart, burned the democratic proposals to cinders and stirred the ashes; I ruined you by letting you blind and ruin yourself. And now, having ventured out of sanctuary, you’ve given me permission to ruin you in the name of the state of Landria. You went after a little too much in taking Vivi. There are many things I’ll let you steal, but I warned you about this one. I’ll lose her on my own terms, thank you, I won’t let her be stolen.”
Then he lunged.
Also, he did some squats, a couple of push-ups, and several handsprings as Ire looked on, bored. Once Quinton had thoroughly warmed up and shaken out his sword arm, he attacked, and things got a lot more interesting."
" “You mistake me. I don’t want to be friends with you. I want you dead. I erased all chance that you would have a change of heart, burned the democratic proposals to cinders and stirred the ashes; I ruined you by letting you blind and ruin yourself. And now, having ventured out of sanctuary, you’ve given me permission to ruin you in the name of the state of Landria. You went after a little too much in taking Vivi. There are many things I’ll let you steal, but I warned you about this one. I’ll lose her on my own terms, thank you, I won’t let her be stolen.”
Then he lunged.
Also, he did some squats, a couple of push-ups, and several handsprings as Ire looked on, bored. Once Quinton had thoroughly warmed up and shaken out his sword arm, he attacked, and things got a lot more interesting."
Sunday, April 3, 2011
Grrrrrrr
Okay, Ire, you really make me mad. I think I smooth out all your plot problems and then...
YOU MAKE THESE COMMENTS CHAPTERS AND CHAPTERS AGO.
"As if I want to be elected over your corpse"?
Trying to send Matthard out of the country?
You're OBVIOUSLY trying to get rid of him and I'm supposed to believe that he's going to blow a gasket when he figures out about the competitor rule?
GAH.
IRE.
SHUT UP. STOP TRYING TO HELP PEOPLE, YOU ARE MAKING THE CLIMAX...ISH... THING... CONFUSING.
Unless it's a massive misinformation thing. Which is kinda is. Matthard hasn't heard about this, so he freaks. Ire needs to be a bit more ominous. Because, really, Matthard... people've told you you're not expendable. You don't think Selah would know?
Or maybe she hates you.
Good grief, he can't be this paranoid.
Oh. And those campaign ideas in scene 16.5/17? You're totally going to be confused about those in later chapters. Oh Ire. I can't maintain a political stance with you. At all.
YOU MAKE THESE COMMENTS CHAPTERS AND CHAPTERS AGO.
"As if I want to be elected over your corpse"?
Trying to send Matthard out of the country?
You're OBVIOUSLY trying to get rid of him and I'm supposed to believe that he's going to blow a gasket when he figures out about the competitor rule?
GAH.
IRE.
SHUT UP. STOP TRYING TO HELP PEOPLE, YOU ARE MAKING THE CLIMAX...ISH... THING... CONFUSING.
Unless it's a massive misinformation thing. Which is kinda is. Matthard hasn't heard about this, so he freaks. Ire needs to be a bit more ominous. Because, really, Matthard... people've told you you're not expendable. You don't think Selah would know?
Or maybe she hates you.
Good grief, he can't be this paranoid.
Oh. And those campaign ideas in scene 16.5/17? You're totally going to be confused about those in later chapters. Oh Ire. I can't maintain a political stance with you. At all.
Friday, March 4, 2011
whining part one million
Today is not really as stressful as I am making it be. Alphonse and Albert have been giving me MASSIVE trouble, ever since I decided to plot out to the end. They don't have the personalities I wish they did, at least, not to the degree I wish they did.
I realize why I avoid plotting.
On the bright side, this SHOULD make things easier. Alphonse's opinion is easily swayed--he sides with his father on everything, follows the rules, is polite, which made the character change so impactful. But, as things are now, it doesn't make sense for him to do that, so he won't. Ire won't help him. Albert will still be an issue.
Those are actually my only major issues, dealing with Alphonse, the slavery issue, and where's Patton. The other things are okay or becoming okay with some reworking. This is the point where I'd usually bail on a story. There's tons I could do with Sedna, after all, but that story gives me the heebies. There's Monarchy, there's Untitled but Important, there's shorts I could be working on.
*deep sigh*
I'll go back to it. I'll know I'll feel better when it comes together. I just know I'm being temperamental, putting off other things for writing, I know I've been in this chair all day, just trying to PLOT. Edit. Plot. Plot. Consternation.
Now I want to dance. Procrastination time.
I realize why I avoid plotting.
On the bright side, this SHOULD make things easier. Alphonse's opinion is easily swayed--he sides with his father on everything, follows the rules, is polite, which made the character change so impactful. But, as things are now, it doesn't make sense for him to do that, so he won't. Ire won't help him. Albert will still be an issue.
Those are actually my only major issues, dealing with Alphonse, the slavery issue, and where's Patton. The other things are okay or becoming okay with some reworking. This is the point where I'd usually bail on a story. There's tons I could do with Sedna, after all, but that story gives me the heebies. There's Monarchy, there's Untitled but Important, there's shorts I could be working on.
*deep sigh*
I'll go back to it. I'll know I'll feel better when it comes together. I just know I'm being temperamental, putting off other things for writing, I know I've been in this chair all day, just trying to PLOT. Edit. Plot. Plot. Consternation.
Now I want to dance. Procrastination time.
Thursday, March 3, 2011
too many
Too many people. Too many plot threads. Before=not enough. Now it's a disconnected monstrosity of things I don't want to abandon.
Such as:
Albert being in the hospital, which was in the first two drafts.
Quinton being killed, which is reasonable but there's so much PLOT wrapped up in it.
At least I can tie up the war... and Matthard is still justifiably angry at Ire, but not AS much, because of the fact Ire tried to get him out of the country. And Ire... poor guy, he is miserable, and I am good at making him so, without having to hurt him, himself.
but what to do about Albert? I got rid of Patton, sent him home, but Tristan just paired up with Guppel and kept going. Wait. Can't do that, they're Britacan and Peternian--- oh KINGS, they're going to war and I've got them looting together.
And there's that slavery mess.
Patton went home. Tristan is waiting for Matthard. Quinton is jealous. Alphonse is swayed by fear (show). Albert is loyal to new regime. Guppel is bailing. Matthard is intent. Selah is responsible. Manda is insufferably in love/dedicated.
Anyone else?
Quinton could unbribe the guards. They should be better by now.
It just seems like so much is sifting through my fingers, leaving things that were important alone, it's all so... loose.
Such as:
Albert being in the hospital, which was in the first two drafts.
Quinton being killed, which is reasonable but there's so much PLOT wrapped up in it.
At least I can tie up the war... and Matthard is still justifiably angry at Ire, but not AS much, because of the fact Ire tried to get him out of the country. And Ire... poor guy, he is miserable, and I am good at making him so, without having to hurt him, himself.
but what to do about Albert? I got rid of Patton, sent him home, but Tristan just paired up with Guppel and kept going. Wait. Can't do that, they're Britacan and Peternian--- oh KINGS, they're going to war and I've got them looting together.
And there's that slavery mess.
Patton went home. Tristan is waiting for Matthard. Quinton is jealous. Alphonse is swayed by fear (show). Albert is loyal to new regime. Guppel is bailing. Matthard is intent. Selah is responsible. Manda is insufferably in love/dedicated.
Anyone else?
Quinton could unbribe the guards. They should be better by now.
It just seems like so much is sifting through my fingers, leaving things that were important alone, it's all so... loose.
Saturday, February 5, 2011
Consternation
Oh my. It's so complicated.
And the finale is... emmmmbaaarrrasssing. No, it's kind of, really bloody, and I'm embarrassed that I shoved it at my grandfather. It's gratuitous violence, though I was trying to scale it back.
I read too much manga, that's the long and short of it.
It'll get fixed, really.
I don't know what I'm doing with Guppel.
And the finale is... emmmmbaaarrrasssing. No, it's kind of, really bloody, and I'm embarrassed that I shoved it at my grandfather. It's gratuitous violence, though I was trying to scale it back.
I read too much manga, that's the long and short of it.
It'll get fixed, really.
I don't know what I'm doing with Guppel.
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